Beast Cultivating System

Hi everyone this is my first novel, so it might be some errors here and there so just bear with me... I do read comments, so feel free to share and I will take them into account throughout the novel.

As someone that reads a lot of translated novels, I'm pretty tolerant towards bad grammar, poorly formatted sentences, weird usages of words and poor writing in general, but reading this novel made me want to scream. It's a shame because I like what's going on in the story and I really want to keep reading, to know what happens next, but I just can't stand how badly written it is. There is constant redundancy. Transition words and other unnecessary words are everywhere. I guess I'll just give an example. This is from the prologue, which is already better written than the regular chapters: "Dana always felt like that living such a ****** life was not meant for her and that she wanted something more, something which could make her blood boil. She didn't fulfil her parents wish in going to university getting a law degree and taking over the family's law firm, and it led to her current status as women in her mid-thirties who hasn't developed a serious relationship once in her life. Although being beautiful has gotten Dana many suitors over the years, as she could never make herself to settle down and start a family as it comes at the sacrifice of her current adventurous lifestyle to cease, which for Dana wasn't something she was willing to accept." Now look how many fewer words there are while retaining the same meaning and level of detail: "Her parents wanted her to get a law degree and take over the family's law firm, but such a ****** life wasn't meant for her. She wanted something more, something to make her blood boil. Despite being beautiful and having many suitors, she was never willing to sacrifice her adventurous lifestyle to developed a serious relationship. Even now, in her mid-thirties, she wasn't ready to settle down and have a family." The worst thing about all of this is that the author's comments (that I've read) are perfectly legible. You're obviously competent enough, so why are you making me sift through garbage to get the story? I can't comment much on the character, plot and world development because I couldn't make it past chapter 6, but so far they seem fine. I hope the author doesn't give up. P.S. 'so' and 'therefore' mean the same damn thing. Stop putting both of them right next to each other at the start of a sentence.

This is brief review of the story so far. There isn't much to grasp due to the book just beginning. I've rated the story 3/5 to give a boost and as a baseline so it's neither bad nor good. Unfortunately, It may devolve over time as the story is another one relating to systems. Not all system novels are bad but... yeah? System novels in general are poorly written and executed. The start of the story is meh, but then again, nothing happened. So this has the potential to be great if the author doesn't rely to heavily on spamming system paragraphs through chapters.

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The English is horrible. The info stuffed down your throat in the first seven chapters (pre prologue) is pointless and could've been easily introduced in one.

Awesome story and the frequency of the updates is better than other stories I can’t wait till the mc will find a good match that she can’t completely overpower or is to strong for her to retaliate against.

Love the novel, other than some minor issues this book is a gold mine. Issues include minimal world background, and inconsistent and dichotomous characterization. Other than that, I want more!!

It's awsome. :D \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/

At first I was like, ahhh is this gonna be another one of those people raising beasts that are really OP, but the person themselves are weak af? But then, when I realised the MC herself was a dragon I was like YAAASSSSSS. So in my opinion everything's great, except the UPDATES.

I really like the MC here. We have honest to god character development, which is insane to me. It's fun watching the MC go from sparing people to plotting their demise. It's also funny that she's incredibly out of tune with the world. Concepts like 'face' have no meaning to her, so she gives it exactly no fucks. She's the perfect mix of personality traits, almost feels like an actual logical person. Arrogant when she can be, humble when she needs to be. I hate reading those stories about some godly badass reincarnating into the body of some dreg with no power... AND STILL ACTING LIKE HE'S A GOD. Even worse when everything just works out for them regardless, it's so stupid. And the romance.... or should I say lack of it. Thank buddha for that, I haven't read a single story with a female MC that didn't make me want to claw my eyes out. Defo give this one a read.

I like this novel very much, get me hooked from the start yet after some time author stopped updating novel timely it made me sad as I like this novel very much. As such I hope one day the author can once again start updating timely. Overall a good read made carve for more

I only read this because I'm a sucker for female protagonists as well as non-human protagonists. Unfortunately, there are WAY WAAAAAYYYYYY too many grammatical errors. Plot holes are frequent. The story is super rushed at times. Dana is too arrogant/prideful/cunning to the point of perfection. She retains zero personality from her past self which is extremely disappointing. The cultivation levels are also extremely and swiftly overcome. It almost seems like a joke. I'm also not a big fan of the system design. Having a shop is just stupid. I'll keep reading but only because female non-human lead combines my most loved leads.

Great story but could do better with spelling like definitely not defiantly. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

I love it i love it so much (°∆° i have been reading it for the past 2 days now becous i am really doing details and stuff and i loved it so much keep doing what you do best writter

dropped at chapter 11.Why would she spare cultivators that try to enslave her??? Seeing this kind of stupid logic, wont bother with the rest of the story.

Hey, I just wanted to ask if everything was going ok? No you don't know me, at least as far as I know, but I've read both mystic and beast system and liked them. I'm not searching for an update or anything just wanted to wish you well and thank you for what you created, so good luck well wishes and thanks for the chapters. P.S. I left this as a comment before I thought about leaving it as a review, so it might pop up a few times.

This story develops really fast. The main character, in my opinion, is not very consistent. There is not a very clear plot, and she unrealistically gains strength too quickly.

I like this novel a lot. As story progession is going on a good direction and characters developments are also timely. So I hope u can keep up updating novel . Nice work,thanks for the such a good novel

Good story execpt it's hard to imagine some points .....,..,....................................... ...................................................... ............................,..........,......... ...............,................................. ..................................................... ...........,...........,........ .......................,..,.........

this is a great novel, at first i had my doubts knowing the novel has a system but until this point the mc hasn't really abused the system or more like the system isn't easily abused, anyway im enjoying the journey and the perspective of the mc it's quite unique. Hopefully the author won't abuse the system int he future