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Alchemy Emperor from Modern World

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Ye chongxio was a scientist in a modern world has seven PHd's transported into a world after met with an accident. watch the journey of his becoming strongest person in cultivation world

Chapter 1Chapter 1:ENTER THE NEW WORLD

Ye chongxio as usual is in his laboratory with his new A.I working on the wonders of plant genes creating a new plant with human like conscious thus embarking the name of God in modern world.

He found a 3*3 cube box in his childhood while hiking on a snow mountain with his parents. He fascinated with it and trying to found its wonders from his childhood. With the help of cube he became most intelligent and talented person with seven PHd's in micro biology, engineering, science field.

He created a new A.I with the base of cube and began to work on his first project. But all plan things didnt go well he encountered a problem while his secretary made a mistake in his schedule and while correcting it he met with an exploxion in his lab. while all people began to evacuate the building he wanted to take the cube and buried under the rubbles of building.

While he thought he was dead drifting in a black space lost in his thoughts he saw a faint light far far away from him. he didn't want to die and began moving towards the light. after god knows how long moving towards light he reached it but the intensity of light is more and saw a faint shadow of cube and began to pick it.

Intensity of light making him blind but gritting his teeth he touch the cube and the whole world around him becoming brighter and brighter. He began to hear some voices around him talking about him something like "he is useless, not able to cultivate, damage dantain etc " get a headache and faint. while fianting his last thought was " I Reincarnate into New World"

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I don't know why everyone else who gave a rating was so gentle with you and your story. If you have little true motivation, then being harsh will make you quit and try to find something you're truly interested in. It's also possible that you will take the criticism and come back stronger than you are now. Your grammar and sentence structure are extremely poor. Your writing skills are so poor that every event that transpires in AEMW is bland, and the only thing I can do without receiving brain damage is glance over it all incredibly quickly. The story itself is poor and most of it seems like copy pasta from other cultivation novels which are far superior in quality. The mc is copy pasta, the way he's OP is at least partly copy pasta, the human setting surrounding mc is most assuredly copy pasta. I would say more but there isn't much of the story left, and the rest is assuredly poorly scrambled together as well. If you're wondering why I'm so harsh in my review, (and my reviews in other places(sorry)), or if you're wondering how I can be so critical, it's ******. I'm extremely critical of myself. That's it. When I write something, I become extremely critical of myself. I get very precise and excruciatingly cold with myself and the things I write. If even one sentence gives me a bad vibe I sit with it as long as I need to make it fit at least decently with the rest of the paragraph. I would never, ever let anything I write see the light of day if I thought that it might be even a quarter of the terror that AEMW is currently. Also, I proofread all my ****, because repeated readings can really help to iron out issues in grammar or sentence structure. Something really helpful is to read your work aloud, hearing what you write really helps dig out awkward phrases. And also, give your writings to: 1. A friend 2. An acquaintance 3. Someone who doesn't like you Each one will catch different things, and if they catch the same things, you can be sure that the person who doesn't like you will tell you all about the issues in your writing. If you don't know who dislikes you, just get a second acquaintance, that's fine too. Also if you have teachers around, try and get English or Creative Writing teachers/professors to proofread as well. That is of course if the teachers/professors have the time or care to read the things you've written. And listen, I know the pain of writing enough, but then getting told I should be more descriptive, it happens all the time for me. But that comment is probably one of the most helpful and motivating comments you can get from anyone. Just ask whoever it is to mark the exact places where they feel your writing could be deeper and more thorough, and soon, you'll have plenty to be working on. (At least you have the courage to let your writings free, my writings are fine on grammar and sentence structure, I just don't let them out because they feel awkward, like something is missing from them. Everything might stay locked away in deep dark places forever, just because I don't like the way they feel.) OwO *Deep Dark Places* ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

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