A Knight's Honour

really enjoyed the novel, lots of potential! hope you continue writing more! i recommend this novel to anyone looking for a good fantasy novel!

I promised sincerity, and consequently I have been quite honest with my feedback. Maybe even a bit too honest. I hope you are not dissuaded from writing after reading what I have written here. Keep in mind: it’s just one person’s opinion. The premise is promising, but it fails to fully capture my attention. Don’t get me wrong: the idea itself is interesting, but I’m not really inclined to keep reading. First off, I couldn’t even get past the first few chapters. Almost every paragraph has a grammatical error or an odd word choice. It really withholds your reader from continuing. I have corrected them in the first half, but after a while it just got to be too much. The characters themselves are a bit flat. I have nearly no information on them. I know the brother is older, likes to care for his sister, and doesn’t know how to handle money. I would like to see some more personality. As your reader I long for uniqueness and texture. You can show this in speech as well as behaviour. When it comes to their surroundings, I am in the dark. I know they’re at a marketplace. Alright, what kind of marketplace? What do they sell beside fruits? What’s the atmosphere like? What region are they in? What kind of people are there? We could just as well at a marketplace in 14th century France as at a marketplace in Babylon in 2000 v.Chr. Overall, I do believe this story has some real potential. Just keep writing and keep on practicing. I wish you all the best!

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The story is very likable. You will want to read it more the more you read it. The characters are also good and described well. I liked Isis - Evelyn's brother. He has a kind heart and responsibility. He likes his sister so much which is admirable. Good luck with the writing. I will wait for the other chapters to release.

This book is so awesome. Outstanding and full of potential. The plot is very interesting and it gives you the hook from the start. great book to read for a great fantastic ride. Good work author. Do your best.

I love the multiple-narrator technique, as it helps connect with each character. The good only had a few chapters, but reading through them, I can tell the story would be adventure packed.

intriguing story and engrossing conversation. The siblings have a cute and a very strong bond . I was able to enjoy the free style of writing the novel has been written. Its just there is no description about the world the novel is taking place, leaving empty holes about the way it works. Overall I enjoyed reading it. Continue the good work and best of luck for future.

I think the freshness of concept and crisp writing is this story's two strong point. However, without world building, character growth it feels somewhat hollow when you start to read. The dialogues did not help my reading experience, characters sounded too stiff, too much like they are reading out descriptions from a book instead of talking with each other and at times dumping too much information on the reader. I would rather if, instead of switching point of views, you stick to someone and try to give me more information about where we are and what is happening. since I was asked to provide a honest review, I have done my best to be Frank with the points that I think needs improvement. I wish you all the very best for your writing and hope you will take the criticism in the constructive sense it was meant to be taken.

The story is really good, the characters are really adorable. I especially like the chemistry between the siblings. I think that the story is off to a great start. Do check it out!

good writing skills and an excellent novel for fans of fantasies novel good background-building and character-building looking forward to new chapters. .

The grammar in the book isn't exactly the best, and the first few chapters were muddling at best. The characters aren't really fleshed out and they're more basic. But the plot is pretty interesting, and I hope it gets better.

Love the premise of the story. The beautiful relationship between the siblings got me hooked! And I am kind of interested in how the lovestory of the FL and her love interest will play out. can't wait to read more.

Only 6 chapters but off to a great start, it's interesting and the pace has a nice flow to it, the story develops in an unpredictable way and the world background is solid. Best of luck to the Dr on this one, I'm cheering for you! <3

The Author's writing style is pretty cool along with the way the story develops and we get to know more about the MC and main characters! The storyline seems fun to read and I can't wait to see where it leads Evelyn to~ An awesome job Author ^^ Loved every part of it~ [img=recommend][img=update]

Storyline is engrossing. There's mystery in this fantasy. Waiting to see what challenges the FMC and MMC would face after getting together. Hope there's a little romance. I think it'll lift the plot. Overall the story is going good. Want to know what happens next.

This book gives a soothing feeling. From humour, to suspense, to mystery to terror... everything seems calculated and keeps us on edge. This book has a bright future. I love the way the dialogues are boldly fleshed out while the plot slowly unfolds. Keep the good work, author!

Very intriguing novel❤️❤️. Love how the characters interact with eachother and how well planned the story is. Can't wait for the rest of the chapters 😌

This is some seriously good storytelling ! Action packed scenes right from the start. This is one book you will not want[img=recommend] to miss if you enjoy knights, demons and all this fantasy and supernaturally related with just a load of real life humanity thrown in the mix.

Really loved the way you've described it but it looks like so so long or lengthy...but although it didn't bored me once and seems nice like a mood changer...in a good way...so loved it as far as I have read..

Great work! I am personally fond of romance novels, but this story got me hooked. It is very well written, the descriptions, the characters, the word choices. I would highly recommend it to fantasy lovers. The potential of this story shines brightly. Keep it up author!