Jaunzel_Mullins_7783

Out the gate I can tell that this author is HEAVILY inspired by "Unordinary". Which is fine, this LN is basically "Unordinary" but with summoners, at least in the beginning, as far as I can tell. I am only in the beginning though. I have nothing too bad to say but the one thing that i don't like is senseless violence and forced hate. For some reason everyone hates Godfrey because he isn't his father, which is stupid. I bare with it simply because I understand that this isn't our world. Power corrupts people so I guess that's the reason everyone is a douchebag. But people rarely act this way. Anyway not too bad objectively.

actually, you are the one who is incorrect. I promise i read the story before I made the review. chapter 3 does state that but the situation steadily got worse from there. chapter 11 Simon states that he only eats once every 2 days and that's it's not healthy for him to become a warrior. in a village of 600 people there is no "avoiding suspicion by buying from different vendors" there are only so many. This ain't a city it's a small village. Someone would have noticed. yes, merchants do keep track of money and so does everyone else in town. especially merchants. When theiving is affecting the economy of the village. YES MERCHANTS START TO CARE WHERE MONEY IS COMING FROM. in this instance one of the villages top income earners left the village because of theft. Even if they were illiterate they aren't ignorant to math so that entire paragraph is a null point. so no, she was not buying food everyday. they were both starving. it's not a little bit suspicious. it's a lot a bit suspicious

Let me explain. When I say exorbitantly I mean relative to how they lived before. it wasn't like they gradually started buying more food. No, they were starving and then the next day she was buying a plethora of food FOR 2 PEOPLE. They went from eating 1 to 2 meals a week each(maybe 6-7 meals between the 2 of them per week. because i think she fed the kid once every 2 days.) to 42 meals A WEEK between the both of them just like that. it may not seem like much to us but in a village with an economy THAT BAD eating 21 times a week out of nowhere should be a giant red flag. In a small village of 600 demons that have lived with each other for decades. They know each other by face, name and occupation. The moms employer knows how much she is being paid. The food vendor knows how much she buys. The towns chief knows how poorly the economy is doing. this woman and her child eat maybe once or twice A WEEK. How is it that no one noticed that a family that was nearly starving to death because they only ate once or twice a week suddenly starts eating 3 times a day? there is no way the employer didn't notice. how was her employer not suspicious? Like her employer didn't start paying her more to do her job so where was this extra money to buy food coming from? there is no way the food vendors didn't notice? they know everyone in town by face Because everyone has to come through them to survive. so how is this woman in the tailor industry, that is well known not to be doing well right now, buying all this food when she was just starving yesterday? there is no way that the village chief shouldn't have

I have read up to the current chapter. You are doing an excellent job so far. I haven't seen anything else like what i mentioned before. the story is very enjoyable. I look forward to reading what you have in store. 👍

He has. I have read up to chapter 168. like I said it's enjoyable. though he still does things i don't quite understand. for instance why does he keep putting away the legendary grade weapon that bypasses durability to fight with his hands feats and a pipe?

This story is a good one. Good and unique twist on a power system. Intriguing story. Decent characters. Decent progression. If I had one grievance it is that the author sets up a "plot device" within the story. the author sets the plot device up early and the correct way. Though the story is good I don't particularly like plot devices as they make every given event's outcome too predictable. I don't have to know what is going to happen because I know that the "plot device" set up by the author is just going to magically whisk the MC out of the situation. That for the most part takes away all suspension in a given situation. I want the MC to succeed but I don't want to KNOW he will succeed. If that makes sense. Plot devices take away this aspect. Anyway I really do actually enjoy the novel despite what I just said.

A couple things to say. this story is HEAVILY inspired by Shadow Slave. Like almost verbatim. it's not a bad thing necessarily, I just hope the author gains some originality somewhere in this story. secondly, the main character IS AN IDIOT. it is hinted that he isn't bright in the first couple chapters. When I say he is an idiot I don't mean that he is simply not a genuis, I mean he is mentally slow. Things that normal people would think about immediately take him forever to realize. He forgets that he has abilities. He goes 30 days without ever trying to figure out what his actual exclusive skill does granted he was unconscious a lot but even then it's inexcusable. You have been warned. If you can get past these things then the story is enjoyable to an extent. it really isn't bad.

I'm in the early stages of this story and there are pros and cons. The story has potential. I like how detailed the author is most of the time. I like the perspective shift of the Main Character so far. I do hope he doesn't become an edge lord but we will see. The part I don't like is that, like I said, the author is detailed MOST of the time but when he isn't it's blatantly obvious plot armor. The main character steals from the rich and then spends the money on himself and his mother exorbitantly and somehow NO ONE notices it? In a village of only 600 demons they should have noticed that ASAP. in a village that size they know each other by face, name and occupation. and it is never explained how he was gonna get away with going from starving family to being a family that eats 3 times a day. The author just basically said "No one is gonna notice this because I said so and I don't feel like thinking of an explanation for why everyone else would be dumb enough to not notice that money is going missing and at the same time these poor demons are eating 3 times a day out of nowhere. " Then he moves to a time skip to move past it. Now this is technically a minor detail in the story and the author might have just wanted to get to the part he deemed as more important but it was really off-putting. I sincerely hope that these blatant plot holes aren't scattered throughout the story. overall the story is decent so far. Nothing that calls for a terrible review. keep it up.

I regret wasting coins on this. it wasn't worth it. Complete waste of potential. The world building and idea of it had some potential even if it was initially a Shadow Slave rip off. I was going to quite at 170 but then he introduced space stuff and I stayed for a while. I regret it. This author is too inconsistent. But the Authors Complete Inability to remember details in his own story combined with the abhorrent amount of plot armor just began to make the story unreadable. I actually cannot count the amount of inconsistencies in this story. it is quite frankly ridiculous. He changes important details like I change clothes. At a point he changes a character's entire moveset like we wouldn't notice. I was baffled. It ended up being the final straw for me. Otherwise it's the typical cliche. Everyone is arrogant for arrogances sake. People are evil for evils sake. the oh so common "Must take revenge for my stained honor" Villains. Everyone is dumb except for the main character. actually scratch that. The main character is Dumb as a box of rocks, it's just that everyone else is written to be DUMBER somehow. I mean anyone outside of Alex and Mira are incapable of thinking of even the most basic things sometimes. The a**pulls with minimal explanation. The power ups that make no sense. like the MC gains an incomplete D rank Divine rank art for telling the federation his talent. "Phoenix fury." CONVENIENTLY its the ONLY d rank fire technique. Now you would imagine the author would be intelligent enough not to have the other part of the incomplete technique be in the same dimension or at least not within the same organization. nope he just freaking stumbles upon the other part of the Divine rank technique IN THE LIBRARY of the school. guess what it's called. "HEART OF THE PHOENIX". In a time of such advance technology. NOONE thought "Huh maybe these 2 Phoenix techniques go together" ridiculous. 2 part of the same technique just sitting in the same dimension. chillin and ain't no one over a century figured it out. calling BS. Anyway imma stop my rant now. if I kept going I would be here all day.

yea, for sure. I'll read your next one.