erik_veldkamp

the story is not very good the timeline is a mess and HP characters are constantly builed by Merlin and seemingly the author. the author seems to have made this story for the sol reason to clown on hp characters

great story but the chapters are a bit messy much is repeated. the timeline in the beginning is a bit messy but it straightens out. ace is mentioned in the beginning but not after that till hé is a baby in chapter 110 fitst chapters are messy but eventual it becomes a good story

i do not think crystal bending is all that different from earth bending only the material

hé is most likely already a Knight qui gon was already quite old by the time of the movies

so the plot armor of a protagonist of a spin-off super lucky in his own story but when interaction with the main story quickly relegated to side character

i thought for a moment Aladdin empire added 2 deserts

it is a excellente story except for the characters. the MC becomes a true arrogant ass the ones you normaly likes to see beat but it is only growing and at this point i do not think it becomes a learning moment. the story becomes a very hard read with a MC as unlikeable as this one became

i was wondering i might have missed it but is this the second or third ninja war. the kazekage died before the third but Minato didn't lead a team till the third it is a great fic but this brought me a little confusion

it is not a very good story he is barley present in the demon slayer world and only uses it for plot convenient power boosts. i personaly do not mind that the demon slayer world became somewhat more powerfull in this story but the way its used its almost 's a stand in for a systeem as for antything else there some good ideas but they are overshadowed by the generic beats of a op mc story.

perhaps but that risk is not really depended on Minato, but the MC main goal is to peacefully nap considering this his goal in no way opposes minato's they actually go really well together with peace in the ninja world if minato lives it reduces the treat of Obito and Akatsuki to such a degree that the MC wish to peacefully nap might become a reality