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Right, but he already stated that at the end of chapter 490 to no reaction from Ludwig.

Ah, I see. I may have missed something but the Ludwig thing didn't come off to me as if he had looped, but rather that he was pretending to have in order to throw off the Apostle on his skills. On the Celine thing, he goes there because he thinks Necros is saying she's alive there, he knows it's related to the vampire hunters because of his quest,, she was sealed hundreds of years ago which is when Celine left she's a true vampire which he's only heard of in reference to the Bastos, and she clearly recognises his cloak. The issue is that if you had a third of that evidence it would be a reasonable deduction that she at least could be Celine and it clashes with the previously established vision of Ludwig as smart and observant. I'd recommend at least removing the part where Ludwig tells Thomas that Necros wouldn't give him the quest if Celine wasn't alive and possibly play up her monstrous nature at the start more and don't make it so clear that she's a True Vampire.

I found this arc very enjoyable. There were a few confusing decisions though. Particularly that 1) Ludwig didn't recognise Celine despite specifically coming to the island because he was sure Necros wouldn't give him a quest related to her if she was dead and 2) Whatever goes on during the Queen fight where he talks like he's already looped even though he doesn't seem to have(to fool the werewolf?), could be made clearer. There are more minor problems that are a matter of taste as well, I wish we had got some direct sign of Celine understanding things within the end of the arc, either by saying something or maybe touching the Bastos cloak. I also wonder why Ludwig didn't sacrifice the souls to go back and save Celine from being transformed after he unlocked his souls and levelled up. I know that probably feels like a large amount of hefty criticism but I really did enjoy this arc. Ludwig pretending to be a questing noble and the whole section with him inviting the adventurers into the abandoned mansion was incredible, really nice to see that classic scene from the other perspective. I also love the idea of the Tyrant Blade Style as it's presented here, the core philosophy being about committing to attacks and finishing lesser enemies with a single strike really helps not only with making the fights impactful but with avoiding all of the chaff and filler of fighting mooks as he advances. I hope this was helpful and please keep writing Biako.

He literally came to the dawn islands because that's the last place she was and he got a quest for it which he assumed meant she must be alive.

One too many syllables in the second half to match here. "And night is long" or "and night grows long" if you want to remain grammatically correct, though that isn't necessary in poetry. Really enjoyed this bit, it does well at conveying the sense of foreboding.

Can't speak much on this, but it doesn't quite flow right in my head. I think there should be a harsher syllable after silence, "must learn to die" or "lays down to die" perhaps?

This works with "blessed" pronounced as in a sentence, but it you want it to read "Bless-ed" you should split the "it's" to "it is" for syllable matching.

I've wanted to write a review for this story for a while but haven't felt like I had a good enough scope of it until the end of the first book. Put plainly, this story is the basics executed well. The setting is one the author is experienced with, that being Undead, System, and Dark Souls inspired. It tends to lean into the usual tropes and have fun with them rather than the usual deconstructions you see in modern fiction. It's simple, straightforward, and solid. So as long as you're happy with those choices I think you'll enjoy this novel.

Gild means to cover with gold, did you mean Geld, "to castrate"?

You might want to cut back on the dark souls references a bit, you're kind of going from merely derivative to direct copying with the pursuer and the grand archives here. It's somewhat jarring and takes you out of it.