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This might be my second review for this fic. Doesn’t matter tbh, this is by far the most ‘top 3’, if not the best, DC fic on the platform as of yet. The quality of writing, the premise, the cast, the story progression, I mean COME ON👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻 The breath of fresh air that this fic brings amongst the ocean of translations that this platform has been a delight.(not bashing tls btw, some translators are doing god’s work out there, it’s just the ratio of good to bad tls is scary). In conclusion, this fic made me goofy-laugh out loud in public creating an incredibly awkward moment for yours truly. Keep up the good work author🙌🏻

The main thing to understand about this fic is that the protagonist is a hero, period. Will he unalive someone? Most likely, but it won't happen often. Hal is a hero, and heroes don't kill. Unless it's the last resort. In that case, Hal is capable of doing anything. The female protagonist is Wonder Woman.

I can talk your ears off with how much i love this story. the characters, even big ones like bruce an Edward are characterized wonderfully. the conflicts feel like they have real weight and impact the story in a meaningful way. if the chapters came out faster I would have given it 5 stars.

This is a slightly better translation of the fanfic God of Souls System, which was completed years ago. [img=recommend]

First of all the smut is nice, it's smooth and not repetitive for now, since it's just started... some sentences do repetitive but it's very negligible, MC is kinda realistic at this point, low on cash and all, strategizing for path forward for his quirk development by getting girls, I mean he begged Midnight and Mt. Lady at start for god sake. So overall it's a nice start, I don't have anything against harem fanfic, some are just worse, so I hope the author can do their best and don't ruin the harem part of this fanfic, don't make it pokemon kind of harem, I've read a lot of them and they're just weird bruh. Anyway, good luck keep going👌

woah!! this was exhilarating, its exactly how OP protagonist should be. No bs, no plot armor saving named character, no word padding... Its absolute perfection!

Major problem is the spelling mistakes for the spells and even if your taking some part of hp ero world you can add things yourself don’t just follow the template and when did he get an owl

Among the usual 200 in the monthly collections, about 10–15 are actually real. That being little or no AI, not a translation, no deleting reviews, no padding chapters. Y'know, just a human making something. This is one of them. As a result, I can't give it any lower than 5. For an actual review, the grammar is great, no issues there. The story is shaping up to be unique, aka AU with real changes, not a canon rehash. Someone had a creative thought and is implementing it. The characters are just developing, so it's hard to tell, but it's doing well so far. The author made some potential pitfalls, aka the MC's blurry red line of power (but functionally really high), which makes most action, growth, fighting, and the like in the later story have a high potential for being boring/pointless. As a result of heavy reliance on characterization, unique personalities and plot are a must later in the story. Otherwise, it would just be stroking the reader's ego, which is boring and shallow. So far, there are a lot of reactions to the MC's actions, which leads to the previously mentioned ego-stroking, feel-good pitfall, so watch out for that. As for the overall writing style, it's mid/good. Remember how I said little to no AI? Well, here it's a little. Some sentences are like so. This. This. This. where it just stops thoughts, often before they form fully. The rest are pretty good. It's light but noticeable if you look. Try not to lean into a complete jerking-the-reader-off overpowered fic. There is a balance. Make a story. I am sure I could think of more to say, but I want to go play Deadlock. Bye, bye :)

I'm enjoying this quite a bit right now because it is written with effort and that makes it good to read as well, the conversations between characters seem relatively human and I'm liking how the story is progressing. My only criticism is that I feel like some paragraphs/sentences run a little longer when they could be a little more concise, but it is hardly a complaint because they aren't blocks of words and are instead engaging to read.

It's good, but at near the end the writing quality degraded using AI. It became an AI slop near the end. A good one, but it gets tiring to read with how unnatural characters interact.

Great fic. Don't know much on Trench Crusade, but the story sells the grim world building well, the characters feel properly individualized and the base building is rather well paced. Came looking for a kingdom building with a disembodied god MC story and so far it has delivered wonderfully (...a bit more base building than kingdom so far, but that is the first step).

I ain’t gonna lie yall this fanfic is actually good compared to all the other Naruto slop that’s been plaguing the timeline especially when it comes to Chinese Naruto fanfics writing quality is a 5 I haven’t noticed any AI usage if this is a translation the dialogue between charachters and the system is good along with the pacing in the sentences/dialogue. It’s a Naruto fic so the story is going to be a 5 the mc is born in the kakashi/obito era at the start of the war but here not in the kakashi friend group he’s with Might Guy so the character development is a 5 the mc doesn’t seem bad he is a civilian so entering the war he was nothing special but he’s definitely stepped up these recent chapters and has grown(thank you system) so far both him and the system aren’t useless. Overall I’m liking it so far updates are also consistent especially since it’s just started only thing I hope for us that it’s not a slow story I hope the mc continues to grow strong gradually and exponentially at times not grow strong and then be completely useless the next chapter like some other Naruto fanfics.

I have mixed feelings. For starters, the author gave Josh a family, yet he retains no memories from before his transmigration. The concept of one soul usurping another person’s body and taking over their life makes me quite uncomfortable—especially since his mother, after living with him for two months, hasn’t even noticed such a drastic change in him. Why not offer an explanation where Makenzie had been reincarnated as Josh from birth, and the accident that triggered the "system" simply restored his memories of his past life? The shock of recovering those memories could have caused him to detach from his current life, only fully reconnecting once he integrated his "Deadstroke" persona. This would explain why no one is alarmed by his shift in personality: his behavior as Josh remains similar enough that any minor differences—stemming from a different upbringing—could easily be attributed to the trauma of a near-death experience. On another note, why did the author decide to make Gwen his stepsister? Is it just to indulge in a sexual fantasy involving a stepsister? I hope Josh’s comments about wanting to sleep with her are merely the product of the fantasies of someone who has transmigrated, and that—now that he’s calmed down a bit—he won’t actually act on those intrusive thoughts. If anything does happen, I hope it’s due to external factors rather than a deliberate plan on Josh’s part. Also, an interesting idea occurs to me for how he could earn "legitimate" money: Josh could create a video game—something along the lines of *Fortnite*—packed with microtransactions. If the game becomes viral enough, he could use an AI to generate "ghost" accounts all over the world to make in-game purchases, thereby laundering any illicit funds he might have obtained through the game. Another idea would be for Josh to become a mercenary who only kills criminals; this way, he could discreetly hunt down Madame Masque without being traced, as he would simply be someone who was "hired to kill her."

I really enjoyed this story! Although the pacing is a little fast, it's still a good read. I think the author could improve the storytelling a bit more, but that's just my personal opinion. I can't say much beyond that since I've never written a story myself, so I wouldn't call this a professional review. For anyone who's unsure whether to give this novel a try, I'd suggest reading a few chapters. It's a pretty good read if you're looking for something entertaining to pass the time!

I've seen many attempts at writing LOTM crossover fanfic. idk if i ever enjoyed even one. I've read enough of em and google searched LOTM enough to grasp the framework. Its an interesting concept yet it was applied so horrendously in every attempt I've read. Especially The Fool. Most just end up being a guy whos always acting and playing role in a world thats supposed to be his own. it feels like work. lol who would want to work every moment of their lives and not enjoy just relaxing and being yourself for a moment? sounds like the worst life ever lol. This story combined both elements very well. he doesnt make the role hes playing his whole existence. and while, so far, hes only really concentrated on getting stronger, hes enjoyed it, and chosen his path freely. and his empathy has been put on display and rightly rewarded for it. Most LOTM stories have an emotionless husk as the MC. usually spit out lines like "its not my problem." Anyways, great story so far. The MC, the plot, his anger at Ains and his lot. thinking about it now. I dont think ive ever read an overlord fanfic where the MC wasnt evil or an emotionless husk so this story is pretty original in my books. I usually would want him to befriend the other main characters but not this time. it just makes sense.

Usually don’t review a fic or story this early, but feel the need to do so as it’s already a good read but author/translator-san, don’t drop it! Thank you.

I have been looking for a story like this one for a long long time (specifically a story where the main character rebuilds the social society for whom each but in another world using characters from that world) please don't drop this I can't wait to see where it goes

absolute peak, this fanfic made me write a song I keep your name in my mouth soft like it still belongs I tell myself I’m over it but the night proves me wrong You’re a Star in my dark world close enough to almost touch within grasp but out of reach and it hurts a little too much I still call you in the quiet even though you’re with him you’re the light I keep reaching for knowing I won’t win I don’t say it out loud but it stays on my chest I still call you in the quiet and it never gets rest I don’t hate the way you left I just hate how soft it feels like the room got colder but the door never sealed Every song sounds like almost every night feels the same I’m still reaching for a Star that already changed names I still call you in the quiet even though you’re with him you’re the light I keep reaching for knowing I won’t win I don’t say it out loud but it stays on my chest I still call you in the quiet and it never gets rest I won’t ask you to come closer I won’t make the silence break I’ll just keep you in the distance where it hurts just enough to stay awake You’re a Star in my dark world within grasp but out of reach and I keep saying your name like the dark might still believe I still call you in the quiet even though you’re with him you’re the light I keep reaching for knowing I won’t win I don’t say it out loud but it stays on my chest I still call you in the quiet yeah… I still call you my Star.

Una historia bastante buena, no te sientes aburrido ni por un momento al leerlo debido a la presencia de Saiki, sigo esperando a que alguien descubra su telepátia

Imma keep updating, rn this is peak buh I'm guessing he'll leave the body strengthening part sooner or later 🥲

It is such a very nice story, love it! 🤩 Overall this story is a very fun read and also very enjoyable, can't wait for more chapter to release in the future!! 🤗✨