Review Detail of PhoenixRebel in Echoes of Kurukshetra
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Balasan5
yeahh i just read two chapters ...and couldn't stop myself from writing this first. You are walking on a thin line here because Mahabharata is a really grey story.. it has layers and layers.. it's not just a good vs evil.. it has a background.. a reasoning and a bigger truth.. a purpose beyond us mortals and a reason as to why the war couldn't be and shouldn't be stopped . So I really hope that you have the required knowledge of not just the events but the reasons as to why?.. only after that you could open the full potential of this story . And I hope you don't disorientate the base of the story because it's not just a random story but MAHABHARAT . Some events can't be changed because if they do then Mahabharata won't make sense.. so just dont' treat it like any other world. And then theres's Lord Krishna himself ... he knows all and he sees all.. he is the one above everything ... so you should keep that in mind.. that everything the mc would do.. is because the lord is allowing him to do . And i am not saying it just because of the religious factor but because it would be foolish writing if Krishna doesn't have knowledge about it all. ( this is general comment )
About the writing ... positive criticism.. so I hope you don't take it otherwise it feels rushed and the system if too much.. the mc needs to learn things rather than just given .. The training for veds.. and the fighting as well. Ik that to write about veds you need to know that yourself but well you have chosen a rather difficult setting to write.. a story that's not fictional and has elements that exist even today so yeah . And instead of system giving him " objectives ".. it would have been better if given freedom to do what it wants.. and let him roam around a lil bit before Major figures comes in ... And the change of setting need not be announced by a heading.. you could just blend in with a sentence or two. that's it ig.. take care and all the best my frinend
small_car:yeahh i just read two chapters ...and couldn't stop myself from writing this first. You are walking on a thin line here because Mahabharata is a really grey story.. it has layers and layers.. it's not just a good vs evil.. it has a background.. a reasoning and a bigger truth.. a purpose beyond us mortals and a reason as to why the war couldn't be and shouldn't be stopped . So I really hope that you have the required knowledge of not just the events but the reasons as to why?.. only after that you could open the full potential of this story . And I hope you don't disorientate the base of the story because it's not just a random story but MAHABHARAT . Some events can't be changed because if they do then Mahabharata won't make sense.. so just dont' treat it like any other world. And then theres's Lord Krishna himself ... he knows all and he sees all.. he is the one above everything ... so you should keep that in mind.. that everything the mc would do.. is because the lord is allowing him to do . And i am not saying it just because of the religious factor but because it would be foolish writing if Krishna doesn't have knowledge about it all. ( this is general comment )