Nice story, but I would love to read an edited version of the story without the lame made up words like kushi. It really kills the vibe for me. It isn't like the primitives from another world are speaking English among themselves, it is accepted that we are reading their original language as English. Just why aren't all of the words translated for gods' sake?
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