Review Detail of Macharonni in DxD: Gamer in ttl would

The quality of writing is decent and the updating is also consistent. However, my problem with the fic is mainly the development. For having such short chapters, the pacing feels really off when the Mc is constantly meeting different characters every chapter. First it’s Yuuma, then Akeno in the next, Rias, Sona, etc. All of this happens in relatively little time. Definitely recommend slowing down and developing the main character itself before continuing the story. Then again it is fanfic and you can do whatever you want, but if you want a better story then slow it down and include more details. Overall, it has potential but needs work.