Hi Author! The story reminds me a lot of Douluo, one of my favorites! I don't know, maybe that's why I felt it lacked a bit of emotion. But overall, it's obviously not bad! The idea of being reborn in a new world is always painful and interesting, at least in the aspect that was Einar's death. I advise you to revise the narrative of the facts, especially in the first chapter, it will have a better impact on the readers. It has a lot of potential!
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