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I'm leaving a honest review. As of now only 9 chapters available. And also i hope ur doing fine author. Also this is a personal review if ur mad about it i dont care. Writing quality *2.8 in the first chapter 60% of its content are cliche, over used waking up, trap in a baby body yadayada also the way of writing is very boring and basic i suggest you a fic with good quality writing ''I realy dont want to be a trainer'' a pokemon fic. i dont know if its original or translation but its good. Stability Updates dunno about this one so *5 next Story development *2 well its basically 1+1=2 but instead you got -1 thats how the development is, suggest to change it. character design *1 uhh mc not that much background story, some are copypaste, also mc is a typical cliche . suggest to add some original with little or normal BG maybe 2 or 3 OG characters butit depends on you, World background.... Same with story development 1+1=-1 you could just change it instead of 1+1 maybe 1x1= 1 hhaha lol like change the devil like instead of fear of human change it to curse energy like in you know what anime and make the devil smarter for an increase in dificulty... yeah most fanfic uses on fixed dificulty and thats boring.. of yea *0.5 not that much effort..

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