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2023-10-08 12:13

I'll start with the problem first. Your dialogues are quite good, but the lack of space and improper use of punctuation are disappointing. It lessen the depth of story and not enjoyable. You can fix it by editing.The first chapter was amazing, and imagining how a ghost weaver works is enjoyable. Going to re-read it again from the start once you fix this issues.

king of the former dynasty-(moved to a new link)

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thanks for your honest review I'll fix it

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Your stories are easy to read and enjoyable . Just need to remove redundancy Good story . Everyone give it a try Recommended

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