Review Detail of GeneralDeFartos_L in Taking the Mafia to the Magic World

I'm impressed. Such high quality work. Awesome world building, everything is so detailed and has it's purpose. Author made a new world with magic and it's power scaling and political system with prominent groups and clear law and order. Great job author, This novel has one of the best world building settings and execution on WebNovel. There are no over the top information dumps, author gets an opportunity to explain something and he explains it and moves on. You don't get a massive world lore dumped into your face out of nowhere without reason. I love MC and his mafiaso values. I love the way he's surviving in this world through mafia, it's so relevant to this world and doesn't feel out of place. MC is steadfast and sticks to his word, he's what you'd expect from a former mafia member. I loved the characters around him and their interactions, even though I would have loved seeing more of lil sis. Everything that happens in this story is logical and follows a process, you don't feel the interactions weird nor do you think the power dynamics out of place. Author did his research, MC is not a hothead boi, when confronted by a powerful opponent, he knows when to compromise and how to deal with it, when given the opportunity to turn a foe into ally, he takes the deal. However, MC has his principal and bottom lines, he won't let go of things that touched his bottom line, even if the other side was a super hottie girl (finally! a character that doesn't go against his principals just cuz the other side is a woman, unlike all other MCs from harem novels), I finally found a rational MC that doesn't let threats slide and doesn't accept what happened just cuz the other side is a woman. Thank you author. This MC here got approached the wrong way by a woman as she lowkey threatened him into doing something, even though she helps and provided him with support later on, our MC still doesn't trust her cuz of that first meeting, which is very logical and rational. Again, Thank you author. ------- Now onto what I didn't particularly like or found problems with, these are my personal opinion: - Author uses the long form of sentence composition, that it makes sentences harder to read and follow and I have to reread.Maybe it's cuz author is not a native English speaker and his native language influences his writing. Example: his men didn't like that, due to his position, as one might think, as he has more potential for future problems. This is an example not from novel but author writes like this a lot. Author could just change the order and have it make more sense instead of complicating it like this. - Another problem is how long winded and how much author writes. While I like the world building, having to read so much when it could've been shorter is just nasty. We read about MC surprising his sis and picking her up, then a long description and reasoning of things related to that, then we resume with MC putting sis down. Come on author, I want more heart warming wholesome interactions and conversation instead of a long ass description about something else. - And finally, my most hated problem here. Too many problems happen. Just too many problems. Author, just give the man some peace for a bit damnit. Some problems could've been avoided with rational thinking but that didn't happen. Examples below: SPOILER SPOILER SPOILER ------------------------------------------------- SPOILER SPOILER SPOILER - When MC gets visited by a local gang (scarlet), another gang general thinks he's now with them and attack him without consulting his leaders might I add, And MC demolished them, so far no problem. Problem comes with all the incidents after that, I understand that this gang has to maintain its image, by why the heck do they keep targeting MC and his group? when MC destroyed one of their outposts and stole them, they didn't know it was him and even suspected it was scarlet gang, but the irrational shit that happened is that they targeted MC like madmen with no reason, and every time there was trouble, they only focused on MC while ignoring every other group just cuz of that first problem, the f*ckers had the possibility of being attacked by scarlet or others but they focused on MC only for revenge, how is that rational? as if destroying him would solve all problems. - Another problem is when MC went to get his second pentagram, he met professors, and then after some chapters got a pentagram that they wanted, and then trouble happened and he saved them, but after all of that he just let them go with neither killing them nor having them sign an agreement or anything to make them shut up and not screw him up by tattling on him. But guess what, they did exactly that, and now he has extra trouble from the royal school, and also from the religious congregation there. Everyone now knows there's someone who's the first in history that achieved the impossible. All that could've been avoided, MC is so rational and smart at times but other times he just becomes stupid to further the plot with more enemies. - Another incident is when suddenly people from the religious congregation in his base of operation attacked him to steal from him. After incapacitating them, he left two and took one, only having a verbal threat and promise to stop them from implicating him, cuz he couldn't kill them all. but then later in the carriage he used tools and artifacts stolen before to imprison his hostage and prevent her from using mana. This doesn't make sense here, it's like a build up for more trouble. He could have just kidnapped them all, they were down, he could have used those tools on them. Or he could've used a deal and made them sign it. END OF SPOILERS. -------------------------------------------------