Review Detail of MarAuthor in Desire of Immortality

Very good, especially considering the author is a beginner writer. The first few chapters might put a lot of you off, but don't worry, by the third chapter it's pretty much completely fine. Additionally, I recommend the author take his time to describe the scenes and characters, there is no need to rush. Seeing a lot of potential here and I will definitely be keeping an eye out for this novel in the future!