Review Detail of diddingsdddd in Blood, Wolves, and Death
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issues: You bounce between past and present tense, always stick to one. In this case it would be past. This leads into the next issue. Sentence structure. You have nice descriptions, but it is immediate overshadowed by repeated phrasing, and poor word choices due to slipping out of past tense constantly. The Dialogue. Punctuation is a problem, easily fixed. But the incorrect use of dialogue tags with over description of what's all ready being conveyed, requires you to look at the redundancy. Other than that the story has good pacing, and paints a clear picture of what's happening, and where.
Blood, Wolves, and Death
Violet_Ivory
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What? I’ve never written in present tense. It’s all past. I went back and checked. Also the whole point of rephrasing at certain times is meant to make the scene more dramatic. The whole dialogue tag thing, it doesn’t really matter all that much. At times i use it to describe the tone, but other times I just like to give people a breather between sets of dialogue. Anyways thanks for the review.