Hello! Here's an honest review. Writing Quality- I can see that you were trying to be as descriptive as possible in all of the scenes, but what's more important is to give readers something to feel. Try writing how the characters feel what they're feeling. Besides that, you are missing some commas, periods, and stuff. Try and edit your drafts (and already published chapters) to the best that you can since there are a lot of errors. Besides that, I can still imagine the scenes taking place, but it wasn't fluid so it didn't catch my attention. Story Development- It's the usual romance stuff and with mates, but I like it. Character Design- I like that the mc is trying to be independent, but they are pretty 2-dimensional. World Background- No need to comment on this since it looks to be set in the real world and the rules of the plot are clearly stated, so good job! Overall, improvement in writing quality- and the story will become much better because the readers would understand it a lot more.
K_Elizabeth
Liked it!
SUKA