Review Detail of subject_F473 in Blazing Swordsman

While I am interested in knowing what's going on, which makes one want to read more, I find myself wishing for more. More description or anything that may be relevant, more insight into what's personally going on with the characters as they navigate life after their connected experience; just a bit more to each perspective. I feel like it may also help with making the world feel more fleshed out. There are eleven perspectives thus far, four of which seem to be for main characters. While I personally don't think changing the perspective often is necessarily a negative, it does need to be done well to work. The flow of the story seems fine. You can follow what's going on despite the shifting. However, expanding the amount in each perspective would help a lot in my opinion. Increasing the immersion in each section would help make things less jarring when it does shift and leave the reader with less of a sense of whiplash from hopping around so much. Aside from that, there are quite a few typos and grammatical errors, but those can always be corrected with some editing. I marked some for you c: Overall, I think it's an interesting concept that should be further refined. This could easily be a diamond in the rough. It just needs some polishing ~ I would be glad to reevaluate my review in the future