Review Detail of Hello_0909 in Reborn as Gohan

Item: Reborn as Gohan
Rating: 3.4

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Hello_0909Lv12yrHello_0909

Your fanfic has potential, but you need to fix your grammar. I recommend using Grammarly to fix some of your sentences. Also, what was the point of him having a son? When he got reincarnated, he just brush it off like it was nothing.

Reborn as Gohan

Phoenixrd

Disukai oleh 4 orang

SUKA

Balasan3

PhoenixrdPenulisPhoenixrd

You do make a fair point

Nightly1:Could have played that better. something like he likes to watch martial arts stuff from books and anime to movies. If he cant even worry about his son, then thats kind Of a Mentally broken Mc

2yr

PhoenixrdPenulisPhoenixrd

The son was more of a gateway into him watching dragon ball

2yr

Nightly1Lv4Nightly1

Could have played that better. something like he likes to watch martial arts stuff from books and anime to movies. If he cant even worry about his son, then thats kind Of a Mentally broken Mc

Phoenixrd:The son was more of a gateway into him watching dragon ball

2yr