Review Detail of yokedjaguar in Multiverse of Real-Life Manhwas (Old)
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Writing feels forced if I'm being honest. I can't really explain it but it's really uncomfortable to read. The author also loves doubling up on his words (i.e very angry and furious). The grammar isn't terrible but its far from great. The mc is pretty basic, he dies and goes to the void, reincarnates with some gifts, he picks a fight with a guy that screams daddy dearest at his beck and call, then afterwards it's going to be antagonist after antagonist, "You hurt my great great grandsons assistants adviserory intern, you deserve nothing but death." type story. Very wuxia. If I were to be honest not that good of a read. If this is your cup of tea, go for it.
Multiverse of Real-Life Manhwas (Old)
East_Wind_Took_Me
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SUKABalasan1
If possible, can you give me an excerpt where you felt that Writing is forced and uncomfortable? I will attempt to improve my grammar as I write. The doubling up of words definitely won't happen in the later chapters. My vocabulary was pretty shallow to remember words for every scenario. The MC might feel basic as this is my first attempt at writing something literary but I will attempt to make him something unique later. Your point about the Wuxia thing is untrue. There is not even a speck of it in the entire fanfiction. Antagonists coming after one another is built on valid reasons. For Ex - Jimmy Bae went against Eunjang as took a commission from Phillip Kim, Forrest Lee was following the orders of Donald Na, Wolf Keum cornered Rowan because he was deemed to be a thief, Jake Ji is going against Felix because he is too much of a threat to be left alone. There is no interconnection between the antagonists except they are a part of the same organisation. I am not considering minor foes. Sorry to see that it was not your cup of tea. Thank you for the review!