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Honest opinion here, as what you've requested. There are a couple minor errors in your writing, as I believe you don't double check each entire chapter thoroughly, so if possible I think you should focus more on that. Stability of updates seems to be great as I see 2 chapters per day, but you've only been writing for 3 days now so I can't give you a full 5 star yet. Story development seems fine as of now, still not giving a 5 star as It's still too early to decide. Character design seems hmm.. the mc seems to be a little too smart and he's using terms that country siders wouldn't know that much about. His background story seems also kinda rushed and it is kind of overused, the whole village/place whatever getting slaughtered and mc falling into despair but its fine still. World background seems to be good, I gave it a 5 star. And another thing is the whole system the dragon gave to Simon. It's a little complicated and stuffy, kinda hard to read. I'd rather much prefer you simplifying it down a little. Along with the stat points things, I honestly didn't know much of what was happening with all that math lol. Just here trying to have a late night read, anyways good luck on your novel mate! It has potential.

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Thanks, I will surely take note of that. I will double check the chapters as well make the system a little bit simpler Honestly I made the system like that as I feared it making the Mc op before he reached a certain milestone. Thanks.