Well written with lots of potential but unfortunately lacking in a few aspects. This novel has great writing quality and an engaging and entertaining plot, compared to most webnovels this is definitely in the top 1% however there are still a few things that should definitely be fixed. (As of chapter 86) The timeline makes no sense. The game started in January of 2100, however he doesn’t meet Emma (Lotus) until into 2102 (According to his last life flashback). Although the events that have taken place in the story so far seem like they may have happened in a week they ‘supposedly’ happened over a few months, even then it would still be early or mid 2100, in six months his mother would be dead. No need to mention 2102 plus however many months it took for him and Emma to have a serious relationship. Another major plothole I’ve realized while writing this is the supposed ‘months’ that have passed. All the fighting has taken place over the course of a few days, not counting time in between events, this is fine, they could have been doing lots of stuff in between that we just don’t see, but we can tell this is not happening since the MC has no growth between events, all his skills, levels, items etc have been gained in the mere few days we have seen. So unless you are going to tell me that he has been spending the majority of these multiple months he has been playing and supposedly been to busy to spend time with his parents (according to a few chapters ago) doing absolutely nothing this simply doesn’t make any sense. Even if this time issue was fixed and the time was compressed back to a few days it would still not fix the issue of his mother living years past when she supposedly died. The next point isn’t a plot hole but something that irks me endlessly the main character is pathetic and brain dead. Why did he not immediately get his mother checked for cancer and treatment when reincarnated. You would think they would have a whole lot of a better chance at treating cancer if you noticed it 1-2 years earlier, but no, he says nothing. Second the whole situation with Emma honestly frames the MC to be a weak and pathetic simp. And then we have this last chapter where he just completely goes off the rails the second he hits some adversity, he hasn’t event attempt to change his mom’s future yet and now he’s going to throw his life away, again, sad and pathetic. Additionally the ease at which he gains power and the OPness of the power he gains is a bit annoying, I’m not trying to complain about the MC being OP in a OP mc novel but it seems like it’s gone a little to far. He can turn into a ghost indefinitely and still use his esper powers (which might I add have no energy cost) to kill whatever he wants. While as a ghost it seems he cannot be harmed by physical attacks, infact we have not yet seen him get harmed at all while a ghost (Does this make him invincible? I assume there is some limit, even still it seems like to most creatures cannot harm him while he can kill whatever). If this wasn’t enough with synergy between his fire skill and the skill that lets him change into an animal he can turn into a phoneix, with his flames around him even if he dies (which he does) he simply is reborn in the fire and can continuously deal damage to more powerful enemies without any risk. (Again, is he invincible? I’m honestly not sure)
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SUKAIf a few things were fixed this could definitely become a top tier novel
(In the beginning of the review when I mention his mother would be dead in 6 months I am referring to when she learns she has cancer in chapter 86 and the previous timeline. When I say the timeline makes no sense I mean that it simply is not possible, since 2102 is quite a bit more than the 6 months it took for his mother to die in the previous timeline, however he does not meet Emma until 2102 and still has time to build a relationship with Emma before his mother dies. Take note that the story starts in June 2100)
woah that's a long review anyway i want to know is this harem or not?
As of Chapter 141, no harem.
Aim_zx:woah that's a long review anyway i want to know is this harem or not?
Thanks for the reply
EldritchBlade:As of Chapter 141, no harem.
It's true that it lacks a bit of a space-time paragraph, I'll try to see that when I review the first chapters, thanks for your constructive criticism.
yo bro, so did he get together with emma again? or not? seriously important so i can choose to stay or leave
Tuluz:(In the beginning of the review when I mention his mother would be dead in 6 months I am referring to when she learns she has cancer in chapter 86 and the previous timeline. When I say the timeline makes no sense I mean that it simply is not possible, since 2102 is quite a bit more than the 6 months it took for his mother to die in the previous timeline, however he does not meet Emma until 2102 and still has time to build a relationship with Emma before his mother dies. Take note that the story starts in June 2100)
