Review Detail of TFH in Tale Of A Bender

Well... There are not many... or none at all where Toph is one of the heroines, it was a pleasant surprise, even more so that this toph version is more mature, more sêx^y and curvier. Now onto the novel itself... it needs to be edited as its has a lot of redaction issues. One of thhe most annoying is the dialogue... Its extremely hard to understand where the dialog starts and were it finishs... I recommend that the dialog is always put in a new line or always the first part of the text... Like this: "This is a dialogue", some text for background. Followeb by some info dumb. [New line] "Next dialog".... Also, sometimes author forgets to use "" for conversations, making it even harder to understand. Lastly.... POWER UP TOPH!... She learnt metal bending due to being caged... but thats only cause she thought about it because being trapped. IF mc introduces the idea of bending metal, sand, lava, glass, mud, liquifying (turn earth into a state similar to quicksand which quickly swallows anything).... Earthbending should allow to bend INORGANIC matter... so any piece of earth, metal, mineral is a go.