Review Detail of DaoistMade in Journey Throuhout The Multiverse

My first comment will be about your line breaks. They were too often and not appealing at all. There were moments when they weren't needed as well. Secondly, while you're providing a lot of information, at the same time i feel like you aren't expanding on the emotions enough or what's going on enough and so it becomes a bit confusing at times. But all in all, it's a very great write up that I'd love to read more about.