Review Detail of MrLollip0p in Journey Throuhout The Multiverse

😙👌. Minimal grammar errors. Great story. To increase quality if your novel I suggest you reduce the info-dumping to 'just what is needed' for that particular time and your line breaks look... not so appealing tbh. But ngl even the info dumping was immersive. you have talent my brother, you just need to refine and polish your writing style.