Review Detail of Sun23 in Basket OF Death

The story starts with an interesting hook, it tug at my heart when the author wrote in great details about the emotions and desperations of people living in such a daunting life. And yes, what I say about the hook is good, but in regard to the score I given I felt that the story can improve. First and foremost, the writing quality, it's good, but need a lot of attention. There were sentences that needs pronouns, and some that need to be reworded. There were two to three words that I think the author has miss spelled. Also commas and quotation marks that are needed and aren't needed is a common issue I found. For the author, I point out two to three issue I found with comments in the story. Contrary to the writing quality, I gave the story development, and character design a four star because the story is still in progress. There wasn't much information given regarding the main character. Yes, there were a bit of description about the main character and his living situation. But I felt like I need more information to grasp the characteristic of main character; his personality, actions, emotions, skills, etc. all of which that makes him the protagonist of the story. As for world background, it's a bit different from the character design. There are details, but a bit vague. Chapter one seem to give reader an insight of the story setting, but at the same time also throw a bit of mystery. It kind of makes me want to rush the author the release the more chapters. I really want to know what kind of world is this!......I read the tags, ahem was not prepared to see that it is different from what I expect, lol. Author that's not the way you describe it in the story! I thought is was a war-fantasy kind of world background. Lol, well then I hope that the author will updates more and further explain the world background in future chapters. All in all, a good read. Author, continue on with the updates! I gave you a five for that [img=recommend]!