Review Detail of Ouroboros001 in Soaring through Omniverse

Needs editing or an editor badly. It's very difficult to read because of the poor syntax and formatting. The writing even if you ignore that is very on the nose. Breaking the show don't tell golden rule. Things like: "Little did the protagonist know. . ." No. Just foreshadow. Could not get into it. If it ever changes I'll come back and change my review.