Review Detail of AMilan in Chronicles of The Styx Syndicate

Shameless self-review here to get me on the rankings, but while I'm here I might as well share some of my thoughts. I have been wanting to write this story for a while, so the character and story ideas are abundant, however, I realise that I am new to this and am therefore looking to improve for both mine and your sake. I am looking for criticisms and ideas. The story follows our MC in his ever bigger descent into the underworld - the birth of a true crime syndicate. Since he views the system, and by extension his quest to build a syndicate as a god given divine mission, he becomes quite fanatical towards the system as the plot develops. This is not a get strong quick OP MC kinda story. Expect slow but solid growth along with the growth of the system until he reaches the pinnacle and who knows when he gets to the pinnacle he might find out that he is just a little frog at the bottom of a very, very steep well. I look forward to interacting with you all, and building a nice community so that this novel can be better both for me and you all.