Review Detail of Loli_hunter in The story of the daughter of the demon queen

Please read the author to the end. This is my private opinion According to the 2 chapters I have read, I will say my impression - The idea is not bad, the execution is bad. I would call what you put out raw materials. What needs to be fixed: 1) We need more descriptions of the environment, characters. 2) Events are happening too fast. 3) In some moments, the characters have no emotions, it feels like robots are talking 4) we (readers) should learn information about the world not from the author's explanations, but it should be presented as an interaction between the characters Before I started reading your novel, I read another novel, if you just compare it on a ten-point scale, then yours is 2 (and then purely for the idea), and the one I read before is 10 Author, I hope that you will accept my criticism and become better, because as I understand it, this is your first work