Definitely an interesting premise! The plot and characters are intriguing so far, but! A lot of typos, basic grammatical errors, and missed punctuations, and sometimes it feels like the story could be narrated better so hopefully you fix that! lots of potential in this story! I recommend using grammarly(you don't have to pay) to fix most of your issues!! a good read overall?
JacobMWierzba
Liked it!
SUKA