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Review Detail of David_Neilsen in Infinite Immortal Murder

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An interesting beginning. The character feels a little one-note sad-sack, but the author has a chance to build onto that. I don't really get a sense of the world, however. The action is in there, but some of it feels skipped over, rather than detailed enough to allow us to live the action.

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Infinite Immortal Murder

Lua_Kai

Liked it!

SUKA

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Lua_KaiPenulisLua_Kai

Thanks for the feedback. I've been meaning to change up the first chapter since I think it's my weakest and it needs the most work.