Review Detail of MonstruoDormido in The Watcher of the Dimensions

I just can't stand the grammar, so I failed to give a good review. The story has no respect to include prepositions, and occasionally misses pronouns. I'm not sure, but that's enough to let me leave from chapter one. someone tell me when the grammar is fixed entirely. Don't trust my other evaluations except the writing quality... from a person on chapter 1