Review Detail of SitOnBread in High School DXD: Nurarihyon

Overall I think that your story is pretty good, but the minor details make It unbearable, for example the way that speach is placed randomly in the text, missing capital letters etc. Also, the way that the relationships between the character and potential love interests are developed seem rushed and kind of out of place, they just fall in love with him straight away for no clear reason, but, with all of this said and done I do think that this is pretty good, keep up the good work :).