Review Detail of LordSpecter3369 in Moving Novel!

This novel is just a practice and planning having missing details will happen a lot If you see anything missing and having ideas that might help or even improve in any way, do comment on it I will not say it will be added, but I will look at it and see what it is I'm missing but if it's good I will add it. As this is not my true novel but just practice go will let me have my true novel become better. If you see anything that is written wrongly or worded wrongly don't mind it as I already noticed, and will not worry about it as this is going to be once again my "Practice Novel". I'm not looking for stones for this novel or reviews just looking for ways to correct my mistakes and make more progress for my novel as I don't want it to be bad.