Great job author! I loved all of the characters introduced, and they had so much depth which is amazing. I do think you should try to emphasize on their surroundings though. For example, try to bring it to life by giving an important scene more description (Are the surroundings cold? Are they warm? Is there anything out of place). These are just some suggestions for you. Otherwise, keep up the good work! :)
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