AldredR

Well, because I'm unluckily seeing to many bad thing in my life. Just wanted to share through the novel without directly telling it to the readers.

Well, because I kinda wanted to put a snippet to all the character. I admit the prologue kinda of off. Well, I'm learning. 😅

No offense, but I'm going to be honest this time author. You introduces a lot of alternative terminology to enrich the narrative and expand the world-building, and I think that's good. However the problem is, it was way to abrupt for me. This kind of transition may leave some readers feeling disoriented. A more gradual integration of these new terms will be a better way to enhance the reader's immersion and understanding. Example, instead of suddenly introducing unfamiliar words without context, you might consider weaving them into the dialogue or descriptions more organically. This would be a better approach to allow readers to acclimate the new vocabulary, so it'll smooth like a butter to read. Another is, when the man at the first episode, who's name is Lord katsura, decides to call him 'Lucy the silver hammer', it was way too sudden bro. as if he seen a weak kid, abruptly think he smart to understand the situation, and then like, ah, you are a kind of a hero boy, I name you Lucy the silver hammer instead of Lucian. I don't know if the Japanese or Chinese will make it sounds cool, but this is English, it is better for author to follow the context at hand. And, to construct the narrative in a more engaging way is definitely way better than just dumped the info without a preceding the even to build momentum. as a writer myself, I want a critic that served to improve my writing. hope author don't get offended by this, and sorry I kinda busy with my job, so I won't lengthen this whole review. overall, while few thing perhaps need to be improved by the author, the story itself had a significant potential to go far, especially the idea about, Tama: the sacred jewels etc. kyuketsuki: some kind of demon or monster(in chp1) trying to possess the mother. Tama artist and many more. It was a new concept that is intriguing. Do give it a try!?

what the, he slept with a wicked girl? what did that mean

sure, I'll do yours👍👍🙏

thank you 🙏🙏🙏