"Are you having a good time?"
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I would have loved to be there in that moment at the tavern.
Thank you man for the constant support, in the following volumes it will be revealed ✨
It's a good chapter, the truth is that I didn't get bored reading it, correcting the detail of the dialogues will make it much better.
...the details of this paragraph pleased me
I have noticed that in the dialogues you mix quotation marks and long dashes. As a recommendation, it is better to choose between one of the two, that detail will make reading less confusing.
wow, it's narrated in first person...you already have my attention
The chapter is good, you added action from the beginning that is a hook, correcting the detail of the dialogues will make the reading more enjoyable
As a recommendation, for dialogues use the long dash or quotes in the chapters, but do not mix them
wow, Ryan has strength [img=nervous]