HystericalWritings

Most elements in this story will diverge from the original Shadow Slave story. Expect new character dynamics, different locations, and changes to the geography. So, no, he is not from the NQSC, and the NQSC will be different from what it is in the original.

😂 I had no experience with writing so i used the First Nightmare as practice. Forgive me!

This is a bit of a long-winded response, but thanks for the feedback. I want to clarify a few things about the system. Soul Cores and Ranks In this story, gaining additional cores is tied to ascension through ranks. Every time a character ascends, they form a new core—so an Awakened can have a maximum of two, and a Divine can reach seven. Why is this? I wanted to change the idea that more Soul Cores equal increased strength. Instead, I’m keeping it simple by making Soul Cores act only as reservoirs of essence. This makes the system easier for me to write. Divine Aspects vs. Soul Cores Divine Aspects are special, but in this story, Aspects don't affect Soul Cores like they did in the original. Instead, Aspects reflect the progress a person has made through the Nightmares. Why is this? I think this creates special cases and makes this story more interesting. For example, an Awakened rank character, by facing insurmountable odds, could achieve a higher rank through extraordinary circumstances during Nightmares. This is similar to how Kai evolved his Aspect. It also makes Sacred or Divine ranks really unique because their rank becomes a testament to the challenges they’ve overcome. If you have any more feedback, I'll be happy to respond.

He is not on the same continent as the Song Clan or Valor; they reside on a different continent. I'm still learning how to do worldbuilding, so expect more detailed explanations later. Thanks for review!

The timeline takes place during Sunny's story. As for the specifics, I won't go into too much detail until later.

I understand you might be frustrated, but I believe it’s best not to get too attached to your stories.

Sorry, that was my mistake for misreading. Have a good one!

Thank you for your comments. However, I’d appreciate it if you could refrain from self-promotion, as I find it a bit off-putting. To answer your other question about improving my writing style, I do read other books, but I sometimes struggle to apply what I’ve learned. I’ve developed my own schedule to help with that, though, so thanks for the advice! I’ll take a look at your writing as well.

I think you're funny, so I like your comment. Feel free to comment more if you want. As for my poor writing from months ago, I could argue that this in staff in particular was incompetent, but honestly, I just couldn't find a better way to make it work. And I am making a ton of changes, because I don't want to balance on a tightrope, additional changes are seen in the aux chapter.

Sorry, it's not. This takes place around the same time as Sunny. It will be explained more throughout the story.