Angry_Chef

Exactly, spot on.

He doesn't act like a former space marine at all. Surely someone would have noticed by now. Hell, Darius was speaking to him so casually by the end of the chapter you'd think he was some random off the street. He just doesn't seem to have the bearing of a space marine, He basically cried a little bit earlier in front of Darius, red flag. It's also been pointed out that he is pretty much a regular damaged human now with no hope of re-agumenting. I can't see any space marine chapter allowing such a person, no matter what they used to be, to have a strong position within the chapter much less a chapter master. Whether he can somehow eke out a win in a physical bout with a fellow space marine to "prove" himself or not. Generally I don't see any space marine being unable to kill multiple of their own in a serious situation if needed ascending to the position of chapter master. All of the chapter masters i can think of posses said trait, it seems to be an obvious constant in warhammer. I imagine with his previously named deficiencies he would be the easiest "chapter master" to kill in the entire galaxy and he would definitely be in the lower percentile of space marines as a whole when it comes to individual martial prowess. I kind of want to see how/if his individual combat strength will be addressed and if possible solved in a believeable way. It sort of seems like you made him a "space marine" but took a lot of the reader's possible enjoyment or fun at such a situation and a majority of the positives for the MC.He doesn't have any of the special/extra organs or resilience that comes with being a space marine. The story is interesting, especially with the lack of warhammer fanfics(there's never enough). Im just wondering how you can convincingly solve this. I'll definitely continue reading.

why not give a Cassandra a heads up? You know, the woman who has been paying his way through life recently. Plus you'd think he would at least tell her about Camille the moment he saw her.

if the MC knows LoL lore how does he not know "C" is Corina?Very convenient.

who's rang

Really, he blurts out Mikasa and Krista. Well i'll withold any judgement for now but I had that knee jerk reaction of "creep" and "what a chump".

I was gonna give this a chance but after this chapter maybe I’ll come back to this at a later time.

Where’d they get her a horse?

Does him having armor even matter? I don’t think you’ve shown it actually be a saving grace once, he got killed by archers for gods sake. Would have been a perfect chance to see that what he wore actually mattered.

How is this a master disciple relationship, hes learned nothing of glintstone sorcery from Sellen . At most it’s an empty title at the moment, why would she continue with someone who seems clearly doesn’t actually care about learning from her?