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He asked not for a perfect life, but a happy one. There is a difference.

Problem for all Wuxia protagonists: Interpreting the right answer.

You can’t just give a review like that dude. You got a problem with something about the fic then elaborate. Telling people he’s stupid doesn’t tell the audience anything. Give us some decisions that he made that support your conclusion. Basics of peer review/ being a respectful audience member.

TM system seems like an easy way to bypass 4 move rule. Work with your primary 4 constantly, and repeatedly install a specific move with a TM when the memory starts to degrade. Seems like something rich people would do. Pay to win trainers.

Does he control the cup or the water… The world may never know.

God:

The author hasn’t planned for long-term quality. Issues I have with your fanfic: -Skills are not properly defined. You haven’t explicitly stated what each skill effects. -You haven’t portrayed the way those skills have affected him very well. For example, when you get very skilled at something the way your mind organizes information changes. The MC’s mental processes don’t change at all. -You haven’t portrayed him having multiple high level skills very well. These skills only seem to come up when they are relevant to the plot, and not when they are passively relevant. They aren’t active skills you use whenever they become relevant. They are a part of him. Examples being: A sculptor must have great hand-eye coordination; as well as a great sense of cause and effect in order to make sure that what they create matches well with what was envisioned, a high level martial artists sense of balance is much higher than the average persons; so much so, that they often seem graceful, a polyglot often makes connections between information faster, an artist that is competent in realism must have an eye for dimensions/measurements, a musician has a great sense of rythm and mood that can translate to just about any social skill. He has 3 of these five skills, and none of them are shown or commented upon once. -Finally, I don’t see how what’s-his-name attempting to save Makima will throw her off his scent. That is still not what an average 4 year old will do, and it’s certainly not in character for his previous incarnation either.

It says it on the screen… What is this guy doing?!?! Quirk 1: Talent Redistribution. It is right there!