DaoistWsow5U

It just had to be harem…. Was so promising until the harem was mentioned in chapter 6. Get a life

Waaay too many pov changes where nothing new happens. We get 5 different pov for the same scene ..

Sooooo many chapter but it’s literally a few chapters that are waaaaaaay to spread out. Sometimes we get like 10 chapters where nothing happen or it’s still the same situation as 10 chapters before. It’s ok to read but really not needed.

Tftc but way to much filler

Tyftc

Overall a great story. Only issue is that some chapters are basically one paragraph long and a lot of the chapters seems way to stretched out. Many chapters can be fused into one no need for part 1-10080022830 just for one chapter on how they sat down to talk. Other than that keep up the great work!

I think so yes

I like it but it feels so familiar to a story on ff . Are you posting it on here? Please let me know

Great story! The last 10 chapters seem to be ver dragged out.

With using onerous and making Ron the victim again.. other than that great chapter