Weebtaku
Hello newbie author here
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membaca
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Membaca buku-buku
I used google translate :Dgot no money to hire a mario
Used google, translate :D
:D
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Hot da*n that cover is amazing! But enough of that, first of all the writing is really really good. It's easy to read and most of all the tone of the words runs well. I like the fact that we didn't get isekaied in the first chapter as it builds it's MC. I smell potential in the story, it's quite a shame there is not a lot of views on this one.
Mabuhay! :D
A tale about angels, demons, and gods. Even with four chapters currently, I can see potential. The writing is extremely well done, It is easy to read with virtually no mistakes on grammar. It is also not overly Shakespearian but provides you with a lot of insight into what the characters are feeling. I also love that the author spent time to actually describe what their characters look like.
I try to end every chapter with a cliffhanger if possible
Yes, thank you for the suggestion
Read up to ch 4, The grammar is fine, there are times I can't tell who is talking but overall it's fine. From what I get is that this story is about hunters like solo leveling. In the first chapter, in my opinion, the author should only include the stats of the MC, not the side characters since at this point we do not care about side characters and it just adds more clutter to the chapter. I think it's best to reveal the side character's stats later in the chapters when there is more content to introduce them. There is not much to go on with, but overall i had a fun time with it.
Who is Lea talking to and are there two Lea's?
or nearby
You don't have to repeat that he's inside a green liquid since you already stated it in the previous paragraph. You can also use around or nearby instead of surroundings since you;ve already used it in the previous paragraph.