Whadyamean

Should’ve done more corporate backstabbing

Not terrible, but not decent, the authors an amateur which is honestly fine. However mixing up the use past and present tense interchangeably confuses me on when and where stuff is happening. The author also exposites a lot, for example the MC, instead of just having that develop naturally theough actions and motivations. It’s not terrible but not decent, nor is it translated or ai slop and the author at least tried so I’m giving it a 2/5. Would not recommend however.

Danny would be a far better name because “Hi my names Micheal what’s yours?” “Lucifer” “Wow……. did your parents have a stroke when they told the doctors?”

Not using past or present tense correctly, expositing the reader with the MCs personality instead of showing it through their actions/motivations and having the most anti hero esc name to ever grace the planet. This isn’t an attack, but hot damn does this so far suck.

First word in the first paragraph of the first chaoter has an error. If that isn’t a sign of what to come I don’t know what is.

I get that there’s r18, but is it to such a point that your thumbnail for the story has to be a woman with busty boobs?

That’s even worse because the MC destroyed all the stuff you could use for fuel. That small boat isn’t gonna be rated to go on the multi day journey the bigger one made. Not to mention that even if this boy not out of basic training somehow doesn’t capsize it when it runs out of fuel they’ll be stranded with no hope of survival. It’s actually worse for them in this scenario because there simply is no chance of reaching the shore unless they roll the impossible odds of the waves taking them there.

It only Oblivion Wing, yunno the signature move of Yvetal the darkness legendary counterpart to Zerneas in the X/Y games.