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  • Bindene
    Bindene2 years ago
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    I see potential in it, keep it up! The only advice I can give is that other characters tell their stories, not just the main character. Anyway, it seems interesting to me, and even if I see it correctly, it's more about the fight scenes, which if I see it correctly, is also described in the Synopsis, so I think you started the story very well