I like the story the premise is great but the first few chapters need to be reread for grammar errors and there are times where a better use of word choice is best. Character’s are suddenly introduced and there are quite a few in the first few chapters. Interacts are great and fights are descriptive. But I can’t really visualize them well enough. The world had many things I want to know and would wish they were described in more detail. Possibly describe the village, city, buildings, ground, and air.

U have a lot of characters but no much backstory on them. If u plan to reveal them in the future sure But the world building needs more than just a premise. Build your individuals more.

Love the dynamic of romance here. Geko was sudden and wished there was more description on how the change from weapon to human and vive versa can be described

A few wording issues but I so far like your description of the characters. Brutal fight and language. Just wish I knew more about the back story of so many other people in this chapter.

sup so I just revamped my series so it lost your review. could you take a look at my series again. I have made some changes again. Hope you enjoy and let me know if you need my opinion any anything. Peace and GN

BTW had to revamp the series? If possible please give me a review on the new Traveling Through Tales. Hope you like the grammar edits and restyling.

In enilion's?

Love it. Where did you get this picture from? Did someone make it?

Any idea when you plan to release more chapters?

Thank you for the power stones. Your support really helps to motivate me. Take care.

How have u been? been busy here but hope you are enjoying the weekend.

probably lol

The characters are based of a variety of games, but I changed them for the sake of plot and overall story. Multiverse plus this makes it so that MC doesn't have omniscience when it comes to the plot. Btw have you guess the anime, manga, or novel its based on so far?

Dude keep the feed back coming I'm loving this.[img=recommend]

Thank you for reading. Hope you enjoy the future chapters. Your feed back is great help and those gif are very fitting. lol. Take care and happy reading. Let me know if you want some recommendations for books.

I was lost at the beginning as there was no background information, but the intensity of the battle drew me in. The transitioning to the next part of the story was good and the details of magic or power in this world has been thought out. You can add to it via other means and details such as tiers or variations but thats up to you. Overall I liked it, but I would love more elaboration on the characters appearances and thoughts.

I know my rating is low, but its mainly due to a lack of world building and spelling. A good point I want to bring forward was the development of the relationship was fast, but felt natural due to the how each character was expressed in a way that made them feel unique. Writing you MC short is a great way to then shoe in other elements such as comedy and romance, or conflict such as discriminations over physical appearances. I also liked how you portrayed James. He seems like the ideal friend but ensure to don't make your characters to one sided. Do not be afraid to invite flaws into the characters.

Thanks for your feedback. I keep that in mind for the next chapters. Stay tuned and DM if you want me to review one of your series

Thank you for sharing this with me. I enjoyed the first chapter. I think you can improve by widening your use of descriptive words.

Its called Traveling Through Tales. Hope you enjoy. Let others know about it since I need all the feedback i can get.