cheshir
Someone who likes to read and draw in a daze everyday
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cheshir1yrBerkomentargirl is dead and met god ahaha
"Usually people run scared when they see me angry but you stayed and answered my question brave girl. My name is Lorelai Hirai the goodness of lost spirits"- cheshir1yrBerkomentar"Ryoko no one was here, it was just you talking with yourself" said Yuto
- cheshir1yrBerkomentar" No this can't be. You... you putted that note in my drink you're still alive??.." said Ryoko scared
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oh, no fight scene
Both if them were really good at swords but in the end Ryoko was the one who won. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
??? wait, they're going to join the bodies???
"We don't have time! The ball will start soon, better to drink these drinks to find out the secret room" said Ryoko - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
20 to 100 bro what
" Yeah Yuto I'm fine...what the heck are those human bodies?" said Ryoko - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
dude is shady af
"You are looking for the secret room right?" - cheshir1yrDiterbitkan
While the grammar is consistent, it is unstable enough that it is meaningless to admit its consistency. Backgrounds and characters are very decently thought out, it is just that the execution of the story writing itself prevents one from fully being engaged with them. The first impression that this novel gives was that it was going to delve into the gritty life of a mob boss, but that is not the case. The story is more centered around the romantic life of the FL, which does make sense since considering the title and the genre, but in this way it is only innovative in the characters and POV of this romance story. Because there seem to be no stakes in the "mafia-centric" portions, the mafia aspect of the novel appears to be decoration to a fiesty FL's fall into romance. I do find the FL to be very appealing and strong in her own way that is not like the traditional "strong woman" archetype. Instead of simply doing a man's job while proclaiming herself to be a woman, Bella does what she damn wants and carries an intoxicating sense of femininity as she does it, redefining femininity as a whole in the process. It's a good idea for a novel, but it is simply not cohesive. It is difficult to determine whether the author should focus on story building or writing quality first to elevate their work. There are high hopes for this novel.
- cheshir1yrBerkomentarCh 3 MEETING HIS EX
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bro is gonna wake up to a full-on war
Never had he been this thankful for the existence of this device. He tapped on it without any delay and chose the 'maximum time' option for his return. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar"You must come from a well-off city because things like anesthetics can only be considered a dream here."
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battle scars!
Considering that it was the monthly vaccine day, most patients during this time were children needing an injection. And within a few hours Poltas had several scratches, a few bruises and one prominent bite mark. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
retract my previous commentary: you're young and hot, Ryoko, tear this little kid up!
"Mum she knows no matter what she does she'll never be a beautiful Swan like me" said Desdemona proud for herself. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
Uh, fondling might not be the best choice of word here....unless he really is fondling...
Axel stopped fondling Drago and watched Ryoko with a worried face. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
This entire sentence is so funny to me for no reason ahahahahaha!
"This big boy was really thirsty" smiled Axel while he was fondling it. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
hm, it's not unrealistic for women to be afraid when the masculinity of men has always been worshiped and advertised (as I assume that this world takes after ours)...rather, Ryoko could have educated Desdemona instead of tearing her down for thinking like the average woman. I wonder if Ryoko is for women, or for herself who just happens to be a woman? Either way, she is intriguing.
" Pathetic" thought Ryoko. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
first thought: adopted?
Ryoko turned back and saw her sister Desdemona coming at her. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
chill bro
"Chill bro as father said we'll explain it to the king tonight. All our family is invited because we'll show our candidat for the competition which will be me. - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
Between the exaggerated dialogue and the sarcastic flairs of the MCs, this is quite taxing to read. There is a lot of emotional outrage going on without much resolution for it. As much as I am intrigued by the story, I can't help but take a break every few paragraphs. In any case, I am still intrigued.
Ch 1 WEDDING DAY - cheshir1yrBerkomentar
wait this is really funny reading about Bella and then seeing her actions through Leon's eyes
" Just shut that trash up ok " she screamed at me and I couldn't believe I was going to marry this lady