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It was a mistake. I changed it to (A+)-rank. Thank you for pointing that out.
Pupil is the center of the eye, which the color surrounds. You can search it on google.
I think I am already late to write my 'shameless author review'. This novel tells the story of a boy who loses his interest, trust and hope in people. He dies and is sent into the novel he read. But, in this second life, he avoids others because of his experiences from his previous life. At least he tries to... I am and probably will be writing this novel just for the sake of writing it. Of course, this doesn't mean I don't need your feedbacks. This is my first novel and I have no writing experience. On top of that, I am not a native speaker. So you may find some plot holes, grammar mistakes, etc. This novel is greatly inspired by TAPOV (The Author's POV). However, I will try to change it and make it more original. But don't expect a masterpiece like TAPOV.
Arion is not the Earth. There is neither Indians nor Americans. As the author of this world, I created this world in a way that it's forbidden to invent the thing called meditating. Are you satisfied now? :) Thanks for reading!
You are right, I've made a logical mistake there. I will fix it now. Thank you.
Not everyone meditates, only mc knows how to meditate because he learned it in his previous life. Meditating is not only way to clear up your mind and gather mana. You can gather mana even if you don't meditate, but that will be slower.
Well, both of our opinions make sense in a way. So I can't really say anything to change your opinion. If you can convince me somehow, I will gladly change how MC feels when he kills the goblins. (I didn't delete your comment, It's deleted automatically when I update the chapter. You can retype your comment if you want.)
It's not like we take someone's life in our daily lives. So, I thought it wasn't something a person from our society could handle so easily, even if the life he took was a goblin's.
You are right. It really is hard for a beginner like him to do these kind of things one after another. I was trying to create an enjoyable fight scene so I unintentionally dismissed this fact. Still, I think it was cool :) Thanks for your feedback.
Can you tell me what you didn't understand? Is it about grammar? Or the scene itself? Or the choice of words? I will try to fix it if you tell me.
I will get into details during the lessons of the academy. For now I just laid the foundations such as races, the mana, appearance of portals and dungeons, status screen (martial arts, spells etc.). It may be lacking but after a few chapters, I will focus on world building. Thanks for the feedback!
I am not a native so sometimes I can't describe what I imagine in my mind. As a result, I do a lot of grammar mistakes and turn it into a really bad writing. I thought it was cool though. Anyway, thanks for reading and your kind feedback :) (Your comment was deleted because I made some correction on the paragraph. If you want, you can type it again.)
*Fortunately, when I thought I would lose my 'mind'...
Have a look at the chapter 7 where I talk about some 'rituals'. Thanks for reading!
I sometimes make corrections when I see wrongs. Apparently, when I update a chapter, all the paragraph comments of that chapter are deleted automatically. So your paragraph comments may have been deleted unintentionally. I will recheck the chapters a few times before I publish so that this won't happen again.