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BobbieBinz2hBerkomentarYeah, imagine how much worse it would be if they were also at war!
Joseph, who was in a secluded corner with his two Guards, saw all this with a mix of emotions, on the one hand, he didn't like so much spending at all, because while the Nobles focused on spending on their luxuries and celebrations, peasants were struggling to survive.- BobbieBinz2hBalas Daoist_broNo witch can parry a bullet straight to the head.
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Read the original, its garbage, with the mc helplessly being seduced and fucked by every woman he comes across, leading to a slew of random ass projects he has to follow through with to not be caught by gal gadot, his gf, who he's grooming and lying to every day to avoid being outed as a man whore. Translator isn't changing much so don't expect much, also randomly missing chapters from the original which was odd but ehh. 2 stars for being legible.
- BobbieBinz20hBalas BobbieBinz
loki*
'Strucker' muttered before dying "You should have killed me before… " as his head cleanly falls off. Yet Hyeon was not happy as she looked at the damaged control panels while red alarms began to sound throughout the base with a countdown that showed they had 60 seconds before the base would explode. - BobbieBinz20hBalas Rillik
it was groot. Just the trope of villain hitting the self-destruct or delete data or insert random Goober, while completely surrounded, being outmatched and watched is annoying. Especially she was told to kill everyone so confused why she even hesitated on his surrender. Sure she's being cautious but still hard to imagine the specifics of the scene. Like watching Tony stark drop the infinity Stone and look picking it up, just invokes..
'Strucker' muttered before dying "You should have killed me before… " as his head cleanly falls off. Yet Hyeon was not happy as she looked at the damaged control panels while red alarms began to sound throughout the base with a countdown that showed they had 60 seconds before the base would explode. - BobbieBinz1dBerkomentarEric slowly stood up: "Of course, I do. You are all a bunch of losers who are here only thanks to Kirk Kerkorian's nepotism. Without him, you would be nobodies."
- BobbieBinz1dBalas BobbieBinz
Though it could have made back more from rentals and DVDs.
At that moment, he wanted to see "Whispers with the Wind" fail after its release. In his past life, he had read about it in newspapers and seen something online, but he didn't know the exact numbers. MGM lost a lot, but how much exactly was unclear, as information wasn't as accessible back then. - BobbieBinz1dBerkomentar
76.2 million + marketing which could be 5-10 million.
At that moment, he wanted to see "Whispers with the Wind" fail after its release. In his past life, he had read about it in newspapers and seen something online, but he didn't know the exact numbers. MGM lost a lot, but how much exactly was unclear, as information wasn't as accessible back then. - BobbieBinz1dBerkomentar
repeated your previous paragraphs here.
Delving into the recesses of my memory, I discover a childhood marked by desolation. A mother unable to cope with her husband's violence, an alcoholic father who transformed his initial kindness into terrifying rage. A home filled with resentment and fear, where light could barely penetrate. - BobbieBinz1dDiterbitkan
- BobbieBinz1dBerkomentar
I thought quarrel only became like this after darklord parasitised him? or is he going to be fighting himself?
"Now, p-please open your books to p-p-p-page thi…th-thirteen," Quirrel stuttered. - BobbieBinz1dBerkomentarI sighed. "No. That would be too easy."
- BobbieBinz1dBerkomentar"Duel!!!"
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Don't take the criticism so hard that it changes what you want to write. I saw the guy complaining too about nothing special, but that's just a personal preference. Your character having martial arts training or other real life professions Is enough, though I admit, it could bring a more general audience if you did. On AI, it isnt nessesarily bad but it is jarring, like reading machine translated novels, the wording gets boring and repetitive, it also makes jumps in logic or miss characterises your cast. When killing walkers the character thinks 'i will kill this walker to protect Alexandria' which isn't in any danger... Or describes him as clumsy when previously you've mentioned hes trained in combat. For the fight scenes, at times, it feels like reading a montage, which Is fine in some circumstances. Like when used to skip the 4 hrs, but the actual fight against the zombie, I have no idea how it happened other than "he attacked, he searched for openings in the zombies defence" It also tends to get overly introspective and repetitive. eg. 'Bob waited with baited breath, a mixture of trepidation and anticipation washed over him.' Its really alot to say such little, and the format of 2 descriptive words forms a very noticeable pattern,.. that just irks me. Id suggest reading it closer and paying attention to characterisation, making sure its sticking to what you want to portray. You could also use the ai as a guide and then rewrite in your own words.
Ch 7 survey - BobbieBinz1dBerkomentar
I see you've discovered Ai.
Paragraf ini telah dihapus. - BobbieBinz1dBerkomentar
sexism.
The male, however, was less fortunate as he was viciously flung into a wall with a loud smack as his head impacted the building's outer shell before collapsing into a state of unconsciousness. - BobbieBinz2dBerkomentarOne, he needed allies. Despite his many spells, he wasn't invincible and could still use the help of others.
- BobbieBinz2dBerkomentar"I'm jealous, I also wanted to leave. But where are you going now?"