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It had been 5 months since the assassination attempt on Belon's life and, his training by the royal guards to use blasters began. His mother had also told of Uncles and Aunts, Royals of different sections on the planet. It was rare they spoke but for declaring war or negotiating peace treaties. He also learned of the Royal Protection Protocol. If the planet ever fell under a large scale invasion, he and his cousins would be placed on a star cruiser for evacuation to a safe location. As Belon walked through the palace, he checked his System. He'd grown significantly in the last 5 months. System Blaster Mastery - Lesser: You have learned to effectively use a blaster weapon and reduce recoil. Force Push: Push objects or people away from you un a linear path. Light Weapon Mastery: Learned the use of light weaponry such as throwing weapons. Force Sense - Lesser: You can sense nearby life forms that contain the force. As Belon passed by the training ground, and explosion sounded out in the castle. Debris began to fall around him from the cracking ceiling.

Get Gramerly, just the free version should help alot. Your paragraphs are way too long, if you change the subject, start a new paragraph. Try putting your writing into a free AI, like co-pilot and ask it to format your story. See what it changes, which can inform your own writing later.

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She has a good personality.

or nuke...

Kind of Vader's defining trait. Slaughtered sandpeople for his mum, turned to the darkside for Padme, Killed the emperor for Luke. He's already been asked that question and he answered.