Brilliant story. You’re off to a great start. The way you’ve developed the world and your characters surrounding this story is rather mature and refined, you’ve touched upon important respects and delved into details; you pay attention to things that most authors ignore. You have all the talent of a great fantasy author with an imagination as expansive as a child’s. Assuming you’re a young person due to some of the language used and the genre, I’d encourage you to keep writing as you will go far as you progress.