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not to criticise you too much author, but this sort of chapter is where most stories die. try to skip such chapters and directly get to the story. the powers can be revealed once he has been reincarnated. from the title itself we know what's going to happen so please skip the initial dialogues.
you are using a lot of chat gpt. it's evident by how everything is show and not tell and there's very less dialogue. i would recommend adding more dialogue. don't narrate these things. show us scenes where there is dialogue and people are doing something. also the time skip doesn't make sense. in 10 years the mc didn't make any friends, hobbies training, etc. that stuff should be expanded upon.
so the Doctor Ujiko is dead?
is he gonna be a suspect spy of AFO?
all quirks have to be registered right? how the fk is he gonna explain all this?
a couple of things: 1) midoriya and you didn't graduate middle school 8 months earlier. the graduation happened after the exams. there's no 8 months break in any education system 2) a little more details and dialogue would be good. if you have not planned for Hana or the grandma to play an important role in the fic, why mention them. just put the mc in a foster home or something. 3) he got the fire quirk. where did he train it. how will he buy more quirks as once it is revealed he has more than 1 quirk, he is screwed as everyone will be after him. 4) how is Hana's quirk a secret. it's her body. kinda hard to keep it a secret as it's his sister's quirk.
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